I think this one needs to go back to your deviant for a bit longer because for starters the fingers need some work.
The left looks like detached ovals, the right has a very sharp knuckle.

Hm.. Can I take the reason of posting your works on here is you need criticize? because deviant art has only compliments but here is a far place than it.
Then I don't go easy on you ∀ﾟ)ｸﾜｯ

Her breasts are so strange... But the bed is cool. Well, it's nice for deviantART and Pixiv, maybe not for here, I don't know. I really don't know and I can't say anything at all about it.
Well, if anyone wants to criticize my work, feel free to visit my deviantART too, lol.
I like critics. No, really. They may sound rude, but they sure are helpful.

Most illustrations are criticized quite harshly here due to the immediate comparison to other more experienced artist :)

ie. Boob shaped strangely, legs too long, fingers looks improperly drawn.

You are right, Aoie. It's hard to compete with professional artists. Amateur pictures will hardly ever look good next to professional pictures. We have to admit the difference is gigantic, unfortunately it's not easy to make a great picture.

I don't criticize because I can't draw shit D:

kyoushiro said:
I don't criticize because I can't draw shit D:

Yeah. I don't criticize for the same reason as you. And I also think it's kind of dumb to criticize on something you can't do, because really, do you have any exp. yourself? But then, when you do it in comparison, it's a bit odd so I get really confused. Xd

Just because I can't draw doesn't mean I can't see.

petopeto said:
Just because I can't draw doesn't mean I can't see.

I have to save this on my "cool sentences" box.

Amateurs can say don't criticize me, but pros can't. anyone can criticize pros. images posted on here are treated drawn by pros.

I'm usually indifferent, so unless it's either really good or suck ass I'll stand my neutral position.

petopeto said:
Just because I can't draw doesn't mean I can't see.

Well said